THE GIFT.. short story

Once upon a time..
There was girl, her name was Mirabel. Most people just call her Mable, this was because when she was little, whenever she was asked to say her name, she would always say Mable, cos you see,Mirabel was kind of a mouthful for her to pronounce.
Mirabel was one of the most beautiful girl you could ever lay eyes on. She had very long, straight, shiny black her. It was so shiny you could almost see your reflection looking at it. She had the most captivating and piercing gray eyes on anyone, eyes that appear to see through your body and into your soul. The effecct of those gray eyes were so pronounced that they were the first thing you notice when you look at her. The second thing is
almost as shocking as those gray eyes. Mirabel was blind.
You see, for all the beauty of those eyes, they had never been able to see the stars, or the ocean, or the trees. She lived in darkness. Mirabel had been living in darkness all her life, it was almost all she knew, Almost.
I say almost because even in all that darkness there was a little bit of sunshine. His name was Harry. Harry was the best thing to ever happen to Mirabel. He loved her so much, he could do anything for her. He wanted to spend the rest of his life with her. One day, her asked Mirabel to marry him, but she was a little bit reluctant because of her condition.
She said to him.. "Harry ... oh sweet Harry... If only i could just see you, if only i could just see the world, i would marry you"
So, the next day, Mirabel found out that a pair of perfectly healthy eyes had been donated to her from an anonymous donor. She was so happy, she called Harry immediately to tell him the wonderful news. Harry was ecstatic. He was so happy because
her dream was finally goin to come true which meant ofcourse that his dream was finally going to
come true.
Mirabel, that same day, went to the hospital to have the procedure done. It was a successful one. The doctors told her that she would be able to see
after a few weeks of recovery, when the bandages come off. Finally, it was D-day. The day for her to take off her bandages. As the bandages were peeled off, the first thing she saw was a very angelic face. She didnt have anything to compare it with because she had never seen anything else in her entire life, but she had always imagined what an angel would look like, and this face was what she would have picked for an angel. She knew right away that this was Harry. This was her sunshine in the dark. The bandages were pulled off completely and she could now see him fully, and he was magnificent..but...????
Harry was so happy that Mirabel could now see, that he got down on one knee in front of her and
asked her right there to marry him. But to his suprise, she said no. You see harry was indeed
magnificent but... he was also blind. Mirabel thought that now that she could see, she wanted to
see the world in all its splendour. She didnt want to be married to a blind person. So she told the one person that had loved her all through her darkness that she could not spend the rest of her
life loving him through HIS darkness. Harry was devastated. He was so heartbroken he could barely breath. It was like his chest had been cut open and someone was pouring hot sauce into
the wound.. In tears, he got up from his kneeling position, and turned to find his way out. But
before leaving, without turning back to face her, he said "TAKE CARE OF MY EYES FOR ME"... and then he left forever.. Leaving Mirabel in shook of the gravity of his Gift.
*The End*

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